>>5976
too big for my monitor, can't see it in much detail

Proportions are okay I guess, but there are anatomy problems. Perspective wise, this is a mess. You're characters lack all since of foreshortening, and ergo look like 2D puppets. Also, adding at least a simple floor would help the perspective, because right now it looks like they're floating in space.

>>5981
This. It looks totally flat.

>>5981

>Perspective wise, this is a mess. You're characters lack all since of foreshortening, and ergo look like 2D puppets.

All right, I'd like to know more about this. How does one do away with the rag-puppet thing? Assuming okay, proportions are okay, but the anatomy? Where is it glaring? Anatomies aren't my very strong points, but I'd like to fix it at least in this picture.

>Also, adding at least a simple floor would help the perspective, because right now it looks like they're floating in space.

Background picture comes later. Right now, I'd like to address the issues in the inked picture first.

Also, Admin, cleanup in this aisle please, CP links, detected.

>>5976
you've still got a lot to learn friend, this is not enough, you have to exceed beyond this sample of yours, the truth is you can do much better than that drawing of yours, just spend more time to practice and study this style of art and don't give up, its not really that difficult to learn japanese style of art, just give it your best and one day, you'll get what you just deserve

suddenly, she lost her necklace in the last panel...

the shirt might be a bit too form fitting. even though she seems to be wearing an another shirt under it, still you can see her nipples poking thru it.
the fingers holding her jacket look a bit awkward, sausace fingers or a grip of a 1 year old.

I like how you did some of the stuff.

the hands are large and a little claw like. the arms and legs are very thick compared to the torso. right after the inner-tube the top of the torso and head are too small even at the angle.

all in all they are a pretty easy fix, just try adjusting your proportions, i know its hard when working with odd perspective like this. The coloring and background and amazing and almost makes you forget about those errors. You have a lot of talent just take some more time to polish up proportions and you could easily pawn that off as pro work

>>5678
You have my thanks. I shall bear your critique, and march forward. Such distorted perspective is foreign land to me.

It looks pretty good to me from a far...but if one takes a closer look...I might see what >>5678 was trying to say...
Nice attempt out of your comfort zone...

i think you have done a great job in colouring..

Original drawing.

bumpity?

don't use lined paper

piece of shit

you suck, go practice more

>>5968
>>5969
When you came pulling in here, did you see a sign that said /ic/?
And do you know why you didn't see that sign?
Because /ic/ faggotry isn't our fucking business that's why

Hey Coordinator, what are the chances that I ask you for a sketch?

>>5940 what do you mean, Mister?? I even can't scan my sketches properly.. Sorry for that,but i think i'm gonna start using photoshop ;_;

>>5943
Asking about No. 6593 in this thread: http://oekaki.extra-muffins.com/b/res/5798.html

If that's too much, just do Yuki then. Please?

I saw >>5672 mentioned about cell-shading and for the past 3 days i've been working with photoshop to learn that technique and finally..(I guess) this is the result.. Nah,im still new at this and you can see a few mistakes that i barely being lazy to fix it.. >>6593 hey,i'm not good at this.. Screw Yuki? ;_;

>>5944 err.. Do you mean, this? Aww I never draw bondage before :(

>>5946
The biggest flaw in this is the palette and its contrasts. The hair just doesn't HAVE shadows, whereas the skin's shadows are barely visible and the jacket has hard contrast. You should try to balance it a little more. If you find this difficult, you can try making a layer with palette colours, duplicating it and moving it next to the original layer, and adjusting its darkness/lightness and things like that. By this, you should get at least a little more balanced look.

>>5953 so,do you mean the problem is colour eh?(I think the anatomy looks awkward) :) by the way thanks for the critics,I'll make effort on it

>>5954
Well I thought I should mostly critique the colouring since you said you don't know how to use PS.

As for the anatomy, I think the most problems are with the head. Its posture is a little stiff and weird and makes me wonder why it's like that, though, I think it looks pretty cute anyway. I think the top of her head is a little too low and too flat and her chin should be pulled to right a bit when we look at her mouth's position. The upper palm seems a bit too big as well.

They're cute nonetheless, you just need more practice with Photoshop and a few anatomical fixes. Keep up the good work!

>>5949
Actually, I meant tied down to the knees, but the fact that you did it, is great enough. Seriously, my upmost thanks.

You should add Haruhi/Mikuru to the picture while you're at it.

Less manly face by making thinner, less curved and more relaxed eyebrows.

looks like you traced the body and then tried to attach a head

what the fuck is with her neck

wow, never did i thought that eyebrows really did affect the face that much... thanks for the tip. i'll try to post a newer one if i get my hands on a scanner o_O

jes the neck is supposed to be that long.
strange dude looks strange

ok, this is the corrected version.
thanks for your help.

>>5868
Um, how did you correct the image?

In any case it looks better now, excellent work. Please come back some other time :]

I like her nipples. Your shit is fucking sick.

nipps are a beautiful thing.

Thanatos, I really like this stuff. Your style is reminiscent of Berserk to me.

Perhaps this is in part due to your style and in part due to your habit, but I have noticed that most of your ladies look the same... the "Generic Yuna from FFX" Look. That's my only gripe about your works. I know with your skills you can do a lot better than the generic Yuna.

>>5872

Yeah I guess I concur. But perhaps, maybe I'm wrong; what he's been posting here might actually be the same lady.

i know its generic but i cant help it cause i dont have any models and i`m pretty happy with drawing her. it would be better if i drew somethting real. Berserk is awesome, so thanks for saying it looks like my drawings, really.
new stuff is on the way.

>>5874

That is quite true. Are these from the same story or something? Or are they simple random sketches right now?

story. working on a different girl now, hopefully more appealing.